[Report This]Date: 18 Apr 2007 12:59:42 am Title: Thirteen
I love your Centaurs, you nailed their dialog perfectly. The herd turning their backs to guarding Harry and Aidan was an awesome image.
Aidan's pov, as rouge was hillarious. I like the idea that he sees hair as feathers. Brilliant.
No doubt about it - the man's "Grouch Account" was completely overdrawn.
LOL - that is a brilliant line for him. And Ron chacing Rogue around the dorm was a riot, and I could definitely see Ron doing this.
Excellent chapter.
[Report This]Date: 06 Jan 2007 07:50:15 am Title: Twelve
Well worth the wait! I really adore your Aidan, and he and Harry are perfect together. Inspired twist with Aidan and Fawkes...can't wait for more! *hint hint*
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 06:17:37 pm Title: Eight
Harry's reaction to Aidan's confessions -----> down pat. ~the reconciliation was mature because Aidan was mature about Harry's perfectly understandable (immature) anger. (I'd be freaked out and suspicious too. ) and it avoids a good bunch of angst that usually happens in the books as well aas in other fanfictions. Always 'cause one character is not willing to make concessions, again understandable, but Aidan's levelheadedness is refreshing.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 06:16:50 pm Title: Eleven
Aidan has balls but isn't imperviousto attacks, again a huge step away from that Mary Sue story ^_^.
"You're just jealous Harry's bitch is prettier than yours ever will be!" Does he even realize what he's saying? Ron, Priceless ^_^
~OOOh bigot drama. makes it more real and adds another fold to the story can't wait to see how that develops. ~both boys defending each other, how sweet ^_^
Author's Response: I had a blast with this chapter, with the interplay between the two groups. Also had fun with Aidan embarrassing Draco. This chapter is the set up for a future surprise.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 06:13:24 pm Title: Ten
OKAY this chapter.....BRILLIANT. Now I WANT Aidan to warn Harry just to see how "the powers that be" balance everything out. they have a quick ass sense of humour! Harry in his time out corner, LOL And the Star Trek analogy puts brains in the fic, not that it didn't already have plenty mind you ^_^
Author's Response: I had so much fun writing this chapter. It came to me while I was sitting at my desk at work. In my family, a variation of the "Say Honk" game was played. We would say, to the honkee "Say 'Honk' fifty times." At which point the honkee would respond "Honk, fifty times." (instead of responding "Honk, honk, honk, honk, etc.") Yeah, silly stuff, I know, but that's how families are. Snape was particularly fun to write in this chapter. I can just see him, trying to hold Mordred and not kill him. Glad you liked the Star Trek analogy. I'm sure the decision about what to say and what to hide would be unnerving.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 06:06:29 pm Title: Nine
Ahh RedNeck USA. they can be damn nice or damn stupid, rarely in between and when they are stupid? *shudders*
~I ain't too keen abiut the fact that Aidan shares a part of book 5 with Harry but, than again heads up about Umbridge is a damn good idea. What a bitch!
~lol "freaking out" Aidan is adorable
Author's Response: Agree with you re: Redneck USA. Shudders indeed. Still trying to decide what things Aidan is going to tell Harry about. Time to re-read Book 5 yet again, eh? Yeah, "freaking out" Aidan is fun.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 06:03:08 pm Title: Eight
Harry's reaction to Aidan's confessions -----> down pat.
~the reconciliation was mature because Aidan was mature about Harry's perfectly understandable (immature) anger. (I'd be freaked out and suspicious too. ) and it avoids a good bunch of angst that usually happens in the books as well aas in other fanfictions. Always 'cause one character is not willing to make concessions, again understandable, but Aidan's levelheadedness is refreshing.
Author's Response: I'm not good at conflict - not in RL, and not in writing. I could never have managed a fic where the two heroes were not speaking for several chapters. Aidan handled the situation the way I would hope that I could, were I ever to find myself in similar straits. It was a very difficult chapter for me to write, though.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:59:05 pm Title: Seven
~Feisty aidan rocks.
~dementor scene: The way you tackle the changed occurences to end with the same eventis brilliant.
Author's Response: It seems to me that if "The Powers that be" have something specific that they want to see happen, they're going to over-ride any interference from humans/wizards.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:57:00 pm Title: Six
Love that Aidan is not powerful but useful nonethless, love how his magic manifests, how do you come up with these things, lol. But again, huge bonus pulling him AWAY from Mary Sue which is always good.
~Okay the flock of quills in V formation honking by the window and letting loose on Snape! Oh Lord! *cracking up*
~shower scene: so sweetthat Harry loves Aidan so much. Lovely sap.
Author's Response: Aidan refuses to allow me to change the weirdness with his spells. The whole thing with the quills came about because I got to sit beside a lake one day and watch a bunch of Canada geese in action. They really do act this way. One or two will take off and fly around the lake a few times, and they keep honking until they get more of their "friends" to follow them, and pretty soon, the whole flock takes off into the distance, all of them honking. And there is often quite a bit of "depositing" going on as well.
I really enjoyed writing this shower scene. I loved the idea of Harry teasing Aidan to distraction like that. Actually, I think teasing shows up a LOT in my writing. Hmmmmmm......interesting.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:52:47 pm Title: Five
~"DidI hurt you, baby?" *squeel* the luvnames ar so cheezy. i like good cheeziness ^_^
~I agree with Harry, Aidan is adorable. *happy sigh* how i love sap.
~For a while you feel that the sudden sexdrive of Harry is too fast but then it is the bond in play and we do know that he had the hots for Cho the previous year, so it's all good. On a tangent, i don't like that JKR put Harry with Ginny, they are so bland. I would have prefered him with another girl, even Hermione would have been better, but she' good wtih Ron.
~OOOh I like dominant Harry alot. Another thing we don't find often. The events linked to Voldie manipulate him so much that it's great to see him in control at least in one aspect of hislife. I really like dominant capable Harry.
~I have to say, you have Severus down pat. Aidan's stronger than me, i'd be rolling on the floor at the shouting. "goth apostle" LOL.
~You like the humping dog joke too? It always gets a laugh out of me, but i admit that i hadn't seen it coming. Hysterical with harry!
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm a schmoop lover too. Can't help myself. And I agree - NO HARRY AND GINNY!!! Ugh! Boring! Harry is gay! He belongs with a hot bloke! No Het! Severus is so much fun to write. But you really need a Thesaurus to do him effectively (lol). Yeah, I liked the idea of the dog humping his leg. He was being arrogant, and that's just what an arrogant person needs to take them down a peg or two.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:43:20 pm Title: Four
~I like that for once Ron is not homophobic and accepts Harry's relation althought you maintain his stubborness and quick fuze. well done ^_^
~The part where Aidan tries to be greatful for what he might have lost when he wakes up made me realize that althought nerdy he isn't a fanboy. Being anerd isn't a problem but a fanboy (or girl) is something to avoid at ALL costs.
Author's Response: Ron has been fun to write in this fic. Aidan trying to prepare for being grateful to be back in Saybrook is actually pretty funny if you've ever seen Saybrook (not eactly a garden spot). I chose that particular town because my beta (Wolfiekins) grew up there.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:38:27 pm Title: Three
~Dame Edna ,lol! Dumbledore being dissed, double LOL!
~Aidan laughs at his own jokes and mental images. So like me! The number of times I had to fight giggles while in the bus so I not appear a mental case ^_^
~I like the dry swearing, makes me thing of my HBP rant which is full of it.
~"I mean certainly there are worse ways to go than being taken out while watching Harry Potter's ass!" *bark oflaughter* Don't we ALL think the same!
~ The oscillation between sweet & dry funny is excellent. the only other fic that achieved the same balance was AbbeyRoads " A Night to Remember". Saddly deleted and never finished.
Author's Response: I am also guilty of laughing at my own inner monologue, so I guess that's why I wrote Aidan that way. I have been on an elevator full of strangers and suddenly burst out laughing at some silly shit going on in my own head. Talk about embarrassing! I also liked the idea of the Sorting Hat picking on Dumbledore. The Sorting Hat is certainly Dumbledore's elder, right?
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:31:24 pm Title: Two
I absolutely love the fact that you aknowledge the HP books.It makes it sooo real. It could be happenning right now! And it's so eerie Dumbledore speaking of this so calmly. I mean I imagine someone appearing suddenly in my life saying that in some other time line my life, my thoughts and actions are novels with a huge fan following and movies! Woo! It's like Bastien in NeverEnding Story reading about himself in the attic. FREAK OUT! ~Thefact that Aidan doesn't completely change the main events pushes him away from the Mary SueSavior definition. Cool 'cause i mock Mary Sues. ~Freaky! Dreamt of the Mactus shit (without the name) the previous night and the day after had this urge to search for new fanfics and fell on yours. Not only is it OMC which is IMPOSSIBLE to find but love the concept, but the Mactus shit ! How freaky is that! *_* Awesome. ~"Shit hemorrhage" lol! ~"I don't no nuthin' bout killin' no dark lords!" Holy! cracked up. I'd say the same ^_^
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:31:11 pm Title: Two
I absolutely love the fact that you aknowledge the HP books.It makes it sooo real. It could be happenning right now! And it's so eerie Dumbledore speaking of this so calmly. I mean I imagine someone appearing suddenly in my life saying that in some other time line my life, my thoughts and actions are novels with a huge fan following and movies! Woo! It's like Bastien in NeverEnding Story reading about himself in the attic. FREAK OUT!
~Thefact that Aidan doesn't completely change the main events pushes him away from the Mary SueSavior definition. Cool 'cause i mock Mary Sues.
~Freaky! Dreamt of the Mactus shit (without the name) the previous night and the day after had this urge to search for new fanfics and fell on yours. Not only is it OMC which is IMPOSSIBLE to find but love the concept, but the Mactus shit ! How freaky is that! *_* Awesome.
~"Shit hemorrhage" lol!
~"I don't no nuthin' bout killin' no dark lords!" Holy! cracked up. I'd say the same ^_^
Author's Response: Yeah, I liked the idea that ht could be happening right now as well. I guess I figured Dumbledore, being almost 200 years old, could take it pretty much in stride. Imagine, whatching all this stuff go on for 200 years. Maybe nothing would surprise you. Interesting that you dreampt about the Mactus concept, and then found a story about it. That has happened to me a few time too. "Shit Hemorrhage" was one of my father's favorite sayings. I always thought it was a pretty funny idea.
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2006 05:20:20 pm Title: One
~The borg: So cool that "mom" knows what her kid is into.
~I know it's a typo, but "pubic" school instead of public, especially when we soon find out that he was reading HP slash,lol!
~I like the goth touch. Gothic in fashion but not in mind. He just likes the cool look but he's not a poser ^_^
~carpal tunnel syndrome, wrist braces, lol Such a nerd characteristic, lol.
~Legolas! So gay and nerdy but confident enough not to care one bit. Cheers! "Legolas, what do your elven eyes see?" *rolling on floor*
~pop culture references are a nice addition. Grounds the fic making it more realistic.
Author's Response: Oops - better go back and fix that pubic/public thing. Thanks for pointing that out. You're the first person who has noticed it (or, who has said so, anyway). Glad you're enjoying the story!